Second draft script

· Woman 30’s
· Three northern men
· Bouncer 30’s
· Doctor
· Mid aged to play 2nd Bouncer

INT. – HOSPITAL – DAY

A woman in her 30’s is running through hospital corridors to find her husband, she has been directed by the receptionist. She then sees her husband through a window, and pushes the door and walks in slowly.

The woman is sitting next to a comatose man in his 40’s. She starts talking to him in a tearful voice. However it seems as she is talking more to herself then him.

Woman

No, no, o god don’t worry. Please come back to me along with your happy and healthy old self. I know things are looking very grim now but I just want to let you know that I *Sniffs* I do love you!

EXT. – CLUB – NIGHT TIME

Scene change. The man is standing in front of a club by the doors as a bouncer. Three northern men are approaching the club. They seem very drunk and are singing and talking complete gibberish.

INT. – HOSPITAL – DAY
Back in the hospital room the woman is still talking to the comatose men.


Woman

This is my entire fault isn’t it? Because I just kept pushing to find a job so that I can buy myself those ridiculous expenses, which I don’t even, need. It’s my entire fault because for being such a selfish cow and that’s why you had to go get more shifts at that wretched nightclub. I’m so sorry Steve I really am. I promise to be more considerate when you wake up, please wake up.

EXT. – CLUB – NIGHT TIME

Back at the club the northern men now approach the man and they start talking to him very drunk.

One of the northern men

Aalrite mate, what youu doing out here in the fucking cold when there is a fucking party going on in there.

The man does not reply.

Another northern men

Ay, are you fucking deaf? He asked you a question man.

Security Guard

Sorry but I’m not going to communicate with you, while your using that tone.

Northern man

O serious you need to get a fucking life mate.

Security Guard

I’m going to ask you to leave, as you wont be coming in.

Northern man

That guy seems to think he is all-important V.I.P security person

Another northern man

Means your not important enough piss head.

Other northern man

Is that true? You think I’m not good enough to talk to you?

The security guard doesn’t reply.

Northern man

Oi, I’m talking to you!

INT. – HOSPITAL – DAY

There is a silent atmosphere where the man is laying, his wife is beside him and all we can hear is the life support machine. As the noises of the machine get louder and louder till there is nothing else to hear a doctor suddenly enters the room. The woman jumps up and starts asking questions.

Woman

How is he? Is he getting better? How long is he going to stay like this?

Doctor

We are still very uncertain about his condition. He has received a very a bad hit to his brain making it unpredictable what will happen next.

Woman (with a raised voice)

How do you mean it’s unpredictable? I thought suppose to be good at this stuff?

Doctor

With injuries to the brain it will be more complicated and we still don’t have enough information…

Woman (furiously cuts in)

But you have done all your stupid scans and tests! Surely you should be able to tell what it’s wrong with him!

Doctor

Please Mrs Stone, you will have to come down. I know this must be a difficult time for…

Woman

Don’t tell me that you have any idea how I feel! This isn’t some kind of film where you can just say things like this and I will be just fine like that!

Doctor

I’m sorry…

Woman

“I’m sorry” isn’t going to do it. Just tell me do you at least know if he’s going to live or die?

Doctor

We really are not sure about his condition…

Woman

Oh just go. Please leave me alone!

The man leaves. The woman starts crying and has rests her head on her husband’s bed.

EXT. – CLUB – NIGHT TIME

The men are still talking to the security guard. You can hear the noises from inside the club.

Northern men

Now that sounds like a good party going on in there. Want to see if we can turn it into a great one?

Security Guard

I’m sorry but you are far too drunk for my liking.

Northern man (mimicking his voice)

“I’m sorry but you are far too drunk for my liking”, jeez to you always try to sound that posh?

The security guard is ignoring them again.

Northern man

Christ he is flipping ignoring us again. He really does think he is too good for us.


Second Northern man

And he also doesn’t want us into his club. He probably thinks northern men aren’t good enough for this area.

A second security guy comes over to inspect what’s going on.

Second security guard

Is there a problem here?

Northern man

Yeah, your dodgy looking friend is making one. He thinks your poxy-looking club is too good for us.

First Security guard

I’m going to have to ask you to leave now.

Northern man

See what I mean? He is still treating us like northern trash we should have him done for racism.

Security guard

This has nothing to do with your background if you are that drunk then we can’t let you in.

Northern man

Why? You think we going to fall over or hurt ourselves.

Second security guard

There is a risk of you hurting others.

Northern man

Because we are just a bunch of drunks, going around causing fights?


They start laughing.
Northern man

Lets go mates this is starting get boring.

The two northern men leave.
Second security guard

You OK?

Security guard

Just about.

Second security guard

Listen those guys are definitely trouble. If they come back make sure to give us a shout, got it.

Security guard

Got it.

INT. – HOSPITAL ROOM – DAY

Scene is speeded up showing that she has been waiting for her husband to wake up for day. She is moving around, sitting and sleeping. Back in normal time, one of the machines makes a noise indicating that there is something wrong with her husband can be heard. The hospital staff starts rushing in.

Woman

What’s going on? What’s happening to him?

The nurses and doctors keep on doing what they are doing.

Woman

Why is this thing doing that noise? Can someone tell me what the hell is happening?

One of the nurses comes over and tries to calm her.

Nurse

I’m sorry but you will have to wait outside until we are finished in here

Woman

What do you mean that’s my husband you are treating will you please tell me what’s the matter with him!

Nurse

I’m sorry

The nurse brings the woman outside and she has to watch through the window and observes what’s happening.

Scene change.

EXT. – CLUB – NIGHT TIME

The Security guard is still by the door. The three northern men are coming back but are now even drunker then before. They slightly stumble and (are singing old football songs maybe).

Northern men (shouts)

Aaalllrigth mate!

Security Guard

You guys again. I already told you you can’t came in when you’re that drunk.

Northern man

Mate you still playing the Mr. V.I.P guy? Lighten up will ya.

Security Guard

I’ll have to ask you to leave again

Northern man

Again? Mate you have some real attitude problems alright. All we want is just a good time so no need to keep on getting lippy with us.

Second northern man

He just thinks because he’s bigger then us he can talk anyway he likes to us.

Third northern man

Is that what it is? You think you’re harder than us have you ever fought a one of us?

Security guard

No I haven’t and neither do I…

Third northern man

Well like my grandpa always says don’t judge a book by its cover

First northern man

And I say you got to first fight a man get to know him.

Security guard

I’m not going to fight anyone here nor anywhere so all of you might as well leave right now!

INT. – HOSPITAL – DAY

The situation in the hospital room has calmed down. The woman is now hysterically talking to the doctor and nurses.

Nurse

Everything is fine now your husband’s condition has stabilized.

Woman

What do you mean stabilized he’s still in a coma.

Nurse

Yes but at least he is we have his condition controlled fro now.

Woman

What do you mean for now is he going to go through this again?

Doctor

At the moment we can’t predict how is condition will be in the next hours…

Woman

Stop saying condition it isn’t helping ok. If you think your patients will feel better because you use your fancy medical talk then your wrong it just makes things worse.

Nurse

Screaming isn’t going to help neither you really have to calm down and be strong for your husband.

Woman

How am I suppose to be strong if I don’t even know what’s going to happen to him your not even sure if he’ll ever wake up.

Nurse

That’s why you have to be strong, I know this will probably be the hardest thing you’ll ever have to do but you will have to be patient and wait for him to wake up.

Woman

Even knowing that he might never wake up?

Nurse

If you really love him then it will be worth the wait.

The woman looks at her husband through the room’s window and you can feel how she is in a state of inner conflict.

EXT. – CLUB – NIGHT

The 3 men are still harassing the security guard.

Security guard

I really had about enough from you guys.

Northern man

We really had about enough from you but you don’t hear us complaining, do you?

Security guard

Listen if you don’t leave right now I’ll have you forcedly remove.


Northern man

Then why don’t you try to forcedly remove us?

One of the men shuffles him and the security guard pushes him back. He tries to take out a walkie-talkie for back up but they slap that out of his hand.

Northern man

Sorry did you just try to call someone? I thought you were big enough to take us all on?

Northern man #2

Yeah what happened mate are you getting scared.

Security man

I want you to leave right now!

Northern man

Still barking out orders? When you going to realize you have nothing to say?

Security guard

If you don’t do as I say then…

Northern man

What? What’s going to happen then?

Security guard

Look just leave me alone I really don’t want any hassle.

Northern man

Uh oh, looks like the big man is shitting his pants.

The men start laughing.

Security men

Please just leave

Northern man

Not until we taught you some manners young misters.

They start to push him around and he is starting to have problems taking care of all of them at once. Now cornered he’s starting to get really scared.

Security guard

Please just let me…

There is a POV of him getting punch by one of the men. Screen goes black.

INT. – HOSPITAL – DAY

The woman is sitting on a chair with looking at her husband whose condition is stable but is still in a coma. She just looks at him in silence waiting and hoping he will wake up. The clicking noise of the clock can be heard with an ECU of it for a few seconds. There is a CU of her face while she is intensely looking at her husband and very slowly starts breaking out in tears.

END

Based on a true story