Wednesday, 16 December 2009
Wednesday, 2 December 2009
Storyboarding animatics analysis
When we watched our animatics we felt it gave us a good visual picture of how the film we are producing is going to look like. We had a rough idea of the ASDs of our shots and could estimate how long our film will be. It helped us coming up on improvements for our film like having maybe more detailed storyboards to work with. We didn’t think our storyboards where messy but we did need more information on how long the shot will lose and what camera angle would be the best. Doing animatics has allowed us to decide what filming techniques are best to use and if it flows well in to the next shot. We also noticed some inconsistencies with our script and storyboards and could fix it before we went into production. It wasn’t hard to do an animatic because of the technology we had available to help us and therefore it didn’t took us long to create one making it even time efficient.
Final draft script
· Woman 30’s
· Three northern men
· Bouncer 30’s
· Doctor
· Mid aged to play 2nd Bouncer
INT. – HOSPITAL – DAY
A woman in her 30’s is running through hospital corridors to find her husband, she has been directed by the receptionist. She then sees her husband through a window, and pushes the door and walks in slowly.
The woman is sitting next to a comatose man in his 40’s. She starts talking to him in a tearful voice. However it seems as she is talking more to herself then him.
Woman
Can’t believe this happened, I really can’t. you always hear about people getting beat up badly for no good reasons but you? I mean you look like someone who would do the beating not getting it *nervous laugh*. Things really are weird nowadays but hey don’t mean life isn’t worth living does it?
Woman quietly sniffs.
Woman
This is my entire fault isn’t it? Because I just kept pushing you to work more so I can spent my day shopping and buying meaning less possessions which no one ever really needs. It’s my entire fault for being such a selfish cow and that’s why you had to go get more shifts at that wretched nightclub and get beaten up. I’m so… *starts sobbing* I’m so sorry Steve I really am. I promise to be more considerate when you wake up, please wake up.
EXT. – CLUB – NIGHT TIME
Scene change. The man is standing in front of a club by the doors as a bouncer. Three northern men are approaching the club. They seem very drunk and are singing and talking complete gibberish.
They approach the security guard and start talking to him very drunk.
One of the northern men
Aalrite mate, what youu doing out here in the cold when there is a party going on in there.
The man does not reply.
Another northern men
Aye, are you deaf? He asked you a question man.
Security Guard
Sorry but I’m not going to communicate with you, while your using that tone.
Northern man
O serious you need to get a fucking life mate.
Security Guard
I’m going to ask you to leave, as you wont be coming in.
Northern man
That guy seems to think he is all-important V.I.P security person
Another northern man
Means your not important enough piss head.
Other northern man
Is that true? You think I’m not good enough to talk to you?
The security guard doesn’t reply.
Northern man
Oi, I’m talking to you!
INT. – HOSPITAL – DAY
There is a silent atmosphere where the man is laying, his wife is beside him and all we can hear is the life support machine. As the noises of the machine get louder and louder till there is nothing else to hear a doctor suddenly enters the room. The woman jumps up and starts asking questions.
Woman
How is he? Is he getting better? How long is he going to stay like this?
Doctor
We are still very uncertain about his condition. He has received a very a bad hit to his brain making it unpredictable what will happen next.
Woman (with a raised voice)
How do you mean it’s unpredictable? I thought suppose to be good at this stuff?
Doctor
With injuries to the brain it will be more complicated and we still don’t have enough information…
Woman (furiously cuts in)
But you have done all your stupid scans and tests! Surely you should be able to tell what it’s wrong with him!
Doctor
Please Mrs Stone, you will have to come down. I know this must be a difficult time for…
Woman
Don’t tell me that you have any idea how I feel! This isn’t some kind of film where you can just say things like this and I will be just fine like that!
Doctor
I’m sorry…
Woman
“I’m sorry” isn’t going to do it. Just tell me do you at least know if he’s going to live or die?
Doctor
We really are not sure about his condition…
Woman
Oh just go. Please leave me alone!
The man leaves. The woman starts crying and has rests her head on her husband’s bed.
EXT. – CLUB – NIGHT TIME
The men are still talking to the security guard. You can hear the noises from inside the club.
Northern men
Now that sounds like a good party going on in there. Want to see if we can turn it into a great one?
Security Guard
I’m sorry but you are far too drunk for my liking.
Northern man (mimicking his voice)
“I’m sorry but you are far too drunk for my liking”, jeez to you always try to sound that posh?
The security guard is ignoring them again.
Northern man
Christ he is flipping ignoring us again. He really does think he is too good for us.
Second Northern man
And he also doesn’t want us into his club. He probably thinks northern men aren’t good enough for this area.
A second security guy comes over to inspect what’s going on.
Second security guard
Is there a problem here?
Northern man
Yeah, your dodgy looking friend is making one. He thinks your poxy-looking club is too good for us.
First Security guard
I’m going to have to ask you to leave now.
Northern man
See what I mean? He is still treating us like northern trash we should have him done for racism.
Security guard
This has nothing to do with your background if you are that drunk then we can’t let you in.
Northern man
Why? You think we going to fall over or hurt ourselves.
Second security guard
There is a risk of you hurting others.
Northern man
Because we are just a bunch of drunks, going around causing fights?
They start laughing.
Northern man
Lets go mates this is starting get boring.
The two northern men leave.
Second security guard
You OK?
Security guard
Just about.
Second security guard
Listen those guys are definitely trouble. If they come back make sure to give us a shout, got it.
Security guard
Got it.
INT. – HOSPITAL ROOM – DAY
Scene is speeded up showing that she has been waiting for her husband to wake up for day. She is moving around, sitting and sleeping. Back in normal time, one of the machines makes a noise indicating that there is something wrong with her husband can be heard. The hospital staff starts rushing in.
Woman
What’s going on? What’s happening to him?
The nurses and doctors keep on doing what they are doing.
Woman
Why is this thing doing that noise? Can someone tell me what the hell is happening?
One of the nurses comes over and tries to calm her.
Nurse
I’m sorry but you will have to wait outside until we are finished in here
Woman
What do you mean that’s my husband you are treating will you please tell me what’s the matter with him!
Nurse
I’m sorry
The nurse brings the woman outside and she has to watch through the window and observes what’s happening.
Scene change.
EXT. – CLUB – NIGHT TIME
The Security guard is still by the door. The three northern men are coming back but are now even drunker then before. They slightly stumble and (are singing old football songs maybe).
Northern men (shouts)
Aaalllrigth mate!
Security Guard
You guys again. I already told you you can’t came in when you’re that drunk.
Northern man
Mate you still playing the Mr. V.I.P guy? Lighten up will ya.
Security Guard
I’ll have to ask you to leave again
Northern man
Again? Mate you have some real attitude problems alright. All we want is just a good time so no need to keep on getting lippy with us.
Second northern man
He just thinks because he’s bigger then us he can talk anyway he likes to us.
Third northern man
Is that what it is? You think you’re harder than us have you ever fought a one of us?
Security guard
No I haven’t and neither do I…
Third northern man
Well like my grandpa always says don’t judge a book by its cover
First northern man
And I say you got to first fight a man get to know him.
Security guard
I’m not going to fight anyone here nor anywhere so all of you might as well leave right now!
INT. – HOSPITAL – DAY
The situation in the hospital room has calmed down. The woman is now hysterically talking to the doctor and nurses.
Nurse
Everything is fine now your husband’s condition has stabilized.
Woman
What do you mean stabilized he’s still in a coma.
Nurse
Yes but at least he is we have his condition controlled fro now.
Woman
What do you mean for now is he going to go through this again?
Doctor
At the moment we can’t predict how is condition will be in the next hours…
Woman
Stop saying condition it isn’t helping ok. If you think your patients will feel better because you use your fancy medical talk then your wrong it just makes things worse.
Nurse
Screaming isn’t going to help neither you really have to calm down and be strong for your husband.
Woman
How am I suppose to be strong if I don’t even know what’s going to happen to him your not even sure if he’ll ever wake up.
Nurse
That’s why you have to be strong, I know this will probably be the hardest thing you’ll ever have to do but you will have to be patient and wait for him to wake up.
Woman
Even knowing that he might never wake up?
Nurse
If you really love him then it will be worth the wait.
The woman looks at her husband through the room’s window and you can feel how she is in a state of inner conflict.
EXT. – CLUB – NIGHT
The 3 men are still harassing the security guard.
Security guard
I really had about enough from you guys.
Northern man
We really had about enough from you but you don’t hear us complaining, do you?
Security guard
Listen if you don’t leave right now I’ll have you forcedly remove.
Northern man
Then why don’t you try to forcedly remove us?
One of the men shuffles him and the security guard pushes him back. He tries to take out a walkie-talkie for back up but they slap that out of his hand.
Northern man
Sorry did you just try to call someone? I thought you were big enough to take us all on?
Northern man #2
Yeah what happened mate are you getting scared.
Security man
I want you to leave right now!
Northern man
Still barking out orders? When you going to realize you have nothing to say?
Security guard
If you don’t do as I say then…
Northern man
What? What’s going to happen then?
Security guard
Look just leave me alone I really don’t want any hassle.
Northern man
Uh oh, looks like the big man is shitting his pants.
The men start laughing.
Security men
Please just leave
Northern man
Not until we taught you some manners young misters.
They start to push him around and he is starting to have problems taking care of all of them at once. Now cornered he’s starting to get really scared.
Security guard
Please just let me…
There is a POV of him getting punch by one of the men. Screen goes black.
INT. – HOSPITAL – DAY
The woman is sitting on a chair with looking at her husband whose condition is stable but is still in a coma. She just looks at him in silence waiting and hoping he will wake up. The clicking noise of the clock can be heard with an ECU of it for a few seconds. There is a CU of her face while she is intensely looking at her husband and very slowly starts breaking out in tears.
END
Based on a true story
· Three northern men
· Bouncer 30’s
· Doctor
· Mid aged to play 2nd Bouncer
INT. – HOSPITAL – DAY
A woman in her 30’s is running through hospital corridors to find her husband, she has been directed by the receptionist. She then sees her husband through a window, and pushes the door and walks in slowly.
The woman is sitting next to a comatose man in his 40’s. She starts talking to him in a tearful voice. However it seems as she is talking more to herself then him.
Woman
Can’t believe this happened, I really can’t. you always hear about people getting beat up badly for no good reasons but you? I mean you look like someone who would do the beating not getting it *nervous laugh*. Things really are weird nowadays but hey don’t mean life isn’t worth living does it?
Woman quietly sniffs.
Woman
This is my entire fault isn’t it? Because I just kept pushing you to work more so I can spent my day shopping and buying meaning less possessions which no one ever really needs. It’s my entire fault for being such a selfish cow and that’s why you had to go get more shifts at that wretched nightclub and get beaten up. I’m so… *starts sobbing* I’m so sorry Steve I really am. I promise to be more considerate when you wake up, please wake up.
EXT. – CLUB – NIGHT TIME
Scene change. The man is standing in front of a club by the doors as a bouncer. Three northern men are approaching the club. They seem very drunk and are singing and talking complete gibberish.
They approach the security guard and start talking to him very drunk.
One of the northern men
Aalrite mate, what youu doing out here in the cold when there is a party going on in there.
The man does not reply.
Another northern men
Aye, are you deaf? He asked you a question man.
Security Guard
Sorry but I’m not going to communicate with you, while your using that tone.
Northern man
O serious you need to get a fucking life mate.
Security Guard
I’m going to ask you to leave, as you wont be coming in.
Northern man
That guy seems to think he is all-important V.I.P security person
Another northern man
Means your not important enough piss head.
Other northern man
Is that true? You think I’m not good enough to talk to you?
The security guard doesn’t reply.
Northern man
Oi, I’m talking to you!
INT. – HOSPITAL – DAY
There is a silent atmosphere where the man is laying, his wife is beside him and all we can hear is the life support machine. As the noises of the machine get louder and louder till there is nothing else to hear a doctor suddenly enters the room. The woman jumps up and starts asking questions.
Woman
How is he? Is he getting better? How long is he going to stay like this?
Doctor
We are still very uncertain about his condition. He has received a very a bad hit to his brain making it unpredictable what will happen next.
Woman (with a raised voice)
How do you mean it’s unpredictable? I thought suppose to be good at this stuff?
Doctor
With injuries to the brain it will be more complicated and we still don’t have enough information…
Woman (furiously cuts in)
But you have done all your stupid scans and tests! Surely you should be able to tell what it’s wrong with him!
Doctor
Please Mrs Stone, you will have to come down. I know this must be a difficult time for…
Woman
Don’t tell me that you have any idea how I feel! This isn’t some kind of film where you can just say things like this and I will be just fine like that!
Doctor
I’m sorry…
Woman
“I’m sorry” isn’t going to do it. Just tell me do you at least know if he’s going to live or die?
Doctor
We really are not sure about his condition…
Woman
Oh just go. Please leave me alone!
The man leaves. The woman starts crying and has rests her head on her husband’s bed.
EXT. – CLUB – NIGHT TIME
The men are still talking to the security guard. You can hear the noises from inside the club.
Northern men
Now that sounds like a good party going on in there. Want to see if we can turn it into a great one?
Security Guard
I’m sorry but you are far too drunk for my liking.
Northern man (mimicking his voice)
“I’m sorry but you are far too drunk for my liking”, jeez to you always try to sound that posh?
The security guard is ignoring them again.
Northern man
Christ he is flipping ignoring us again. He really does think he is too good for us.
Second Northern man
And he also doesn’t want us into his club. He probably thinks northern men aren’t good enough for this area.
A second security guy comes over to inspect what’s going on.
Second security guard
Is there a problem here?
Northern man
Yeah, your dodgy looking friend is making one. He thinks your poxy-looking club is too good for us.
First Security guard
I’m going to have to ask you to leave now.
Northern man
See what I mean? He is still treating us like northern trash we should have him done for racism.
Security guard
This has nothing to do with your background if you are that drunk then we can’t let you in.
Northern man
Why? You think we going to fall over or hurt ourselves.
Second security guard
There is a risk of you hurting others.
Northern man
Because we are just a bunch of drunks, going around causing fights?
They start laughing.
Northern man
Lets go mates this is starting get boring.
The two northern men leave.
Second security guard
You OK?
Security guard
Just about.
Second security guard
Listen those guys are definitely trouble. If they come back make sure to give us a shout, got it.
Security guard
Got it.
INT. – HOSPITAL ROOM – DAY
Scene is speeded up showing that she has been waiting for her husband to wake up for day. She is moving around, sitting and sleeping. Back in normal time, one of the machines makes a noise indicating that there is something wrong with her husband can be heard. The hospital staff starts rushing in.
Woman
What’s going on? What’s happening to him?
The nurses and doctors keep on doing what they are doing.
Woman
Why is this thing doing that noise? Can someone tell me what the hell is happening?
One of the nurses comes over and tries to calm her.
Nurse
I’m sorry but you will have to wait outside until we are finished in here
Woman
What do you mean that’s my husband you are treating will you please tell me what’s the matter with him!
Nurse
I’m sorry
The nurse brings the woman outside and she has to watch through the window and observes what’s happening.
Scene change.
EXT. – CLUB – NIGHT TIME
The Security guard is still by the door. The three northern men are coming back but are now even drunker then before. They slightly stumble and (are singing old football songs maybe).
Northern men (shouts)
Aaalllrigth mate!
Security Guard
You guys again. I already told you you can’t came in when you’re that drunk.
Northern man
Mate you still playing the Mr. V.I.P guy? Lighten up will ya.
Security Guard
I’ll have to ask you to leave again
Northern man
Again? Mate you have some real attitude problems alright. All we want is just a good time so no need to keep on getting lippy with us.
Second northern man
He just thinks because he’s bigger then us he can talk anyway he likes to us.
Third northern man
Is that what it is? You think you’re harder than us have you ever fought a one of us?
Security guard
No I haven’t and neither do I…
Third northern man
Well like my grandpa always says don’t judge a book by its cover
First northern man
And I say you got to first fight a man get to know him.
Security guard
I’m not going to fight anyone here nor anywhere so all of you might as well leave right now!
INT. – HOSPITAL – DAY
The situation in the hospital room has calmed down. The woman is now hysterically talking to the doctor and nurses.
Nurse
Everything is fine now your husband’s condition has stabilized.
Woman
What do you mean stabilized he’s still in a coma.
Nurse
Yes but at least he is we have his condition controlled fro now.
Woman
What do you mean for now is he going to go through this again?
Doctor
At the moment we can’t predict how is condition will be in the next hours…
Woman
Stop saying condition it isn’t helping ok. If you think your patients will feel better because you use your fancy medical talk then your wrong it just makes things worse.
Nurse
Screaming isn’t going to help neither you really have to calm down and be strong for your husband.
Woman
How am I suppose to be strong if I don’t even know what’s going to happen to him your not even sure if he’ll ever wake up.
Nurse
That’s why you have to be strong, I know this will probably be the hardest thing you’ll ever have to do but you will have to be patient and wait for him to wake up.
Woman
Even knowing that he might never wake up?
Nurse
If you really love him then it will be worth the wait.
The woman looks at her husband through the room’s window and you can feel how she is in a state of inner conflict.
EXT. – CLUB – NIGHT
The 3 men are still harassing the security guard.
Security guard
I really had about enough from you guys.
Northern man
We really had about enough from you but you don’t hear us complaining, do you?
Security guard
Listen if you don’t leave right now I’ll have you forcedly remove.
Northern man
Then why don’t you try to forcedly remove us?
One of the men shuffles him and the security guard pushes him back. He tries to take out a walkie-talkie for back up but they slap that out of his hand.
Northern man
Sorry did you just try to call someone? I thought you were big enough to take us all on?
Northern man #2
Yeah what happened mate are you getting scared.
Security man
I want you to leave right now!
Northern man
Still barking out orders? When you going to realize you have nothing to say?
Security guard
If you don’t do as I say then…
Northern man
What? What’s going to happen then?
Security guard
Look just leave me alone I really don’t want any hassle.
Northern man
Uh oh, looks like the big man is shitting his pants.
The men start laughing.
Security men
Please just leave
Northern man
Not until we taught you some manners young misters.
They start to push him around and he is starting to have problems taking care of all of them at once. Now cornered he’s starting to get really scared.
Security guard
Please just let me…
There is a POV of him getting punch by one of the men. Screen goes black.
INT. – HOSPITAL – DAY
The woman is sitting on a chair with looking at her husband whose condition is stable but is still in a coma. She just looks at him in silence waiting and hoping he will wake up. The clicking noise of the clock can be heard with an ECU of it for a few seconds. There is a CU of her face while she is intensely looking at her husband and very slowly starts breaking out in tears.
END
Based on a true story
Second draft script
· Woman 30’s
· Three northern men
· Bouncer 30’s
· Doctor
· Mid aged to play 2nd Bouncer
INT. – HOSPITAL – DAY
A woman in her 30’s is running through hospital corridors to find her husband, she has been directed by the receptionist. She then sees her husband through a window, and pushes the door and walks in slowly.
The woman is sitting next to a comatose man in his 40’s. She starts talking to him in a tearful voice. However it seems as she is talking more to herself then him.
Woman
No, no, o god don’t worry. Please come back to me along with your happy and healthy old self. I know things are looking very grim now but I just want to let you know that I *Sniffs* I do love you!
EXT. – CLUB – NIGHT TIME
Scene change. The man is standing in front of a club by the doors as a bouncer. Three northern men are approaching the club. They seem very drunk and are singing and talking complete gibberish.
INT. – HOSPITAL – DAY
Back in the hospital room the woman is still talking to the comatose men.
Woman
This is my entire fault isn’t it? Because I just kept pushing to find a job so that I can buy myself those ridiculous expenses, which I don’t even, need. It’s my entire fault because for being such a selfish cow and that’s why you had to go get more shifts at that wretched nightclub. I’m so sorry Steve I really am. I promise to be more considerate when you wake up, please wake up.
EXT. – CLUB – NIGHT TIME
Back at the club the northern men now approach the man and they start talking to him very drunk.
One of the northern men
Aalrite mate, what youu doing out here in the fucking cold when there is a fucking party going on in there.
The man does not reply.
Another northern men
Ay, are you fucking deaf? He asked you a question man.
Security Guard
Sorry but I’m not going to communicate with you, while your using that tone.
Northern man
O serious you need to get a fucking life mate.
Security Guard
I’m going to ask you to leave, as you wont be coming in.
Northern man
That guy seems to think he is all-important V.I.P security person
Another northern man
Means your not important enough piss head.
Other northern man
Is that true? You think I’m not good enough to talk to you?
The security guard doesn’t reply.
Northern man
Oi, I’m talking to you!
INT. – HOSPITAL – DAY
There is a silent atmosphere where the man is laying, his wife is beside him and all we can hear is the life support machine. As the noises of the machine get louder and louder till there is nothing else to hear a doctor suddenly enters the room. The woman jumps up and starts asking questions.
Woman
How is he? Is he getting better? How long is he going to stay like this?
Doctor
We are still very uncertain about his condition. He has received a very a bad hit to his brain making it unpredictable what will happen next.
Woman (with a raised voice)
How do you mean it’s unpredictable? I thought suppose to be good at this stuff?
Doctor
With injuries to the brain it will be more complicated and we still don’t have enough information…
Woman (furiously cuts in)
But you have done all your stupid scans and tests! Surely you should be able to tell what it’s wrong with him!
Doctor
Please Mrs Stone, you will have to come down. I know this must be a difficult time for…
Woman
Don’t tell me that you have any idea how I feel! This isn’t some kind of film where you can just say things like this and I will be just fine like that!
Doctor
I’m sorry…
Woman
“I’m sorry” isn’t going to do it. Just tell me do you at least know if he’s going to live or die?
Doctor
We really are not sure about his condition…
Woman
Oh just go. Please leave me alone!
The man leaves. The woman starts crying and has rests her head on her husband’s bed.
EXT. – CLUB – NIGHT TIME
The men are still talking to the security guard. You can hear the noises from inside the club.
Northern men
Now that sounds like a good party going on in there. Want to see if we can turn it into a great one?
Security Guard
I’m sorry but you are far too drunk for my liking.
Northern man (mimicking his voice)
“I’m sorry but you are far too drunk for my liking”, jeez to you always try to sound that posh?
The security guard is ignoring them again.
Northern man
Christ he is flipping ignoring us again. He really does think he is too good for us.
Second Northern man
And he also doesn’t want us into his club. He probably thinks northern men aren’t good enough for this area.
A second security guy comes over to inspect what’s going on.
Second security guard
Is there a problem here?
Northern man
Yeah, your dodgy looking friend is making one. He thinks your poxy-looking club is too good for us.
First Security guard
I’m going to have to ask you to leave now.
Northern man
See what I mean? He is still treating us like northern trash we should have him done for racism.
Security guard
This has nothing to do with your background if you are that drunk then we can’t let you in.
Northern man
Why? You think we going to fall over or hurt ourselves.
Second security guard
There is a risk of you hurting others.
Northern man
Because we are just a bunch of drunks, going around causing fights?
They start laughing.
Northern man
Lets go mates this is starting get boring.
The two northern men leave.
Second security guard
You OK?
Security guard
Just about.
Second security guard
Listen those guys are definitely trouble. If they come back make sure to give us a shout, got it.
Security guard
Got it.
INT. – HOSPITAL ROOM – DAY
Scene is speeded up showing that she has been waiting for her husband to wake up for day. She is moving around, sitting and sleeping. Back in normal time, one of the machines makes a noise indicating that there is something wrong with her husband can be heard. The hospital staff starts rushing in.
Woman
What’s going on? What’s happening to him?
The nurses and doctors keep on doing what they are doing.
Woman
Why is this thing doing that noise? Can someone tell me what the hell is happening?
One of the nurses comes over and tries to calm her.
Nurse
I’m sorry but you will have to wait outside until we are finished in here
Woman
What do you mean that’s my husband you are treating will you please tell me what’s the matter with him!
Nurse
I’m sorry
The nurse brings the woman outside and she has to watch through the window and observes what’s happening.
Scene change.
EXT. – CLUB – NIGHT TIME
The Security guard is still by the door. The three northern men are coming back but are now even drunker then before. They slightly stumble and (are singing old football songs maybe).
Northern men (shouts)
Aaalllrigth mate!
Security Guard
You guys again. I already told you you can’t came in when you’re that drunk.
Northern man
Mate you still playing the Mr. V.I.P guy? Lighten up will ya.
Security Guard
I’ll have to ask you to leave again
Northern man
Again? Mate you have some real attitude problems alright. All we want is just a good time so no need to keep on getting lippy with us.
Second northern man
He just thinks because he’s bigger then us he can talk anyway he likes to us.
Third northern man
Is that what it is? You think you’re harder than us have you ever fought a one of us?
Security guard
No I haven’t and neither do I…
Third northern man
Well like my grandpa always says don’t judge a book by its cover
First northern man
And I say you got to first fight a man get to know him.
Security guard
I’m not going to fight anyone here nor anywhere so all of you might as well leave right now!
INT. – HOSPITAL – DAY
The situation in the hospital room has calmed down. The woman is now hysterically talking to the doctor and nurses.
Nurse
Everything is fine now your husband’s condition has stabilized.
Woman
What do you mean stabilized he’s still in a coma.
Nurse
Yes but at least he is we have his condition controlled fro now.
Woman
What do you mean for now is he going to go through this again?
Doctor
At the moment we can’t predict how is condition will be in the next hours…
Woman
Stop saying condition it isn’t helping ok. If you think your patients will feel better because you use your fancy medical talk then your wrong it just makes things worse.
Nurse
Screaming isn’t going to help neither you really have to calm down and be strong for your husband.
Woman
How am I suppose to be strong if I don’t even know what’s going to happen to him your not even sure if he’ll ever wake up.
Nurse
That’s why you have to be strong, I know this will probably be the hardest thing you’ll ever have to do but you will have to be patient and wait for him to wake up.
Woman
Even knowing that he might never wake up?
Nurse
If you really love him then it will be worth the wait.
The woman looks at her husband through the room’s window and you can feel how she is in a state of inner conflict.
EXT. – CLUB – NIGHT
The 3 men are still harassing the security guard.
Security guard
I really had about enough from you guys.
Northern man
We really had about enough from you but you don’t hear us complaining, do you?
Security guard
Listen if you don’t leave right now I’ll have you forcedly remove.
Northern man
Then why don’t you try to forcedly remove us?
One of the men shuffles him and the security guard pushes him back. He tries to take out a walkie-talkie for back up but they slap that out of his hand.
Northern man
Sorry did you just try to call someone? I thought you were big enough to take us all on?
Northern man #2
Yeah what happened mate are you getting scared.
Security man
I want you to leave right now!
Northern man
Still barking out orders? When you going to realize you have nothing to say?
Security guard
If you don’t do as I say then…
Northern man
What? What’s going to happen then?
Security guard
Look just leave me alone I really don’t want any hassle.
Northern man
Uh oh, looks like the big man is shitting his pants.
The men start laughing.
Security men
Please just leave
Northern man
Not until we taught you some manners young misters.
They start to push him around and he is starting to have problems taking care of all of them at once. Now cornered he’s starting to get really scared.
Security guard
Please just let me…
There is a POV of him getting punch by one of the men. Screen goes black.
INT. – HOSPITAL – DAY
The woman is sitting on a chair with looking at her husband whose condition is stable but is still in a coma. She just looks at him in silence waiting and hoping he will wake up. The clicking noise of the clock can be heard with an ECU of it for a few seconds. There is a CU of her face while she is intensely looking at her husband and very slowly starts breaking out in tears.
END
Based on a true story
· Three northern men
· Bouncer 30’s
· Doctor
· Mid aged to play 2nd Bouncer
INT. – HOSPITAL – DAY
A woman in her 30’s is running through hospital corridors to find her husband, she has been directed by the receptionist. She then sees her husband through a window, and pushes the door and walks in slowly.
The woman is sitting next to a comatose man in his 40’s. She starts talking to him in a tearful voice. However it seems as she is talking more to herself then him.
Woman
No, no, o god don’t worry. Please come back to me along with your happy and healthy old self. I know things are looking very grim now but I just want to let you know that I *Sniffs* I do love you!
EXT. – CLUB – NIGHT TIME
Scene change. The man is standing in front of a club by the doors as a bouncer. Three northern men are approaching the club. They seem very drunk and are singing and talking complete gibberish.
INT. – HOSPITAL – DAY
Back in the hospital room the woman is still talking to the comatose men.
Woman
This is my entire fault isn’t it? Because I just kept pushing to find a job so that I can buy myself those ridiculous expenses, which I don’t even, need. It’s my entire fault because for being such a selfish cow and that’s why you had to go get more shifts at that wretched nightclub. I’m so sorry Steve I really am. I promise to be more considerate when you wake up, please wake up.
EXT. – CLUB – NIGHT TIME
Back at the club the northern men now approach the man and they start talking to him very drunk.
One of the northern men
Aalrite mate, what youu doing out here in the fucking cold when there is a fucking party going on in there.
The man does not reply.
Another northern men
Ay, are you fucking deaf? He asked you a question man.
Security Guard
Sorry but I’m not going to communicate with you, while your using that tone.
Northern man
O serious you need to get a fucking life mate.
Security Guard
I’m going to ask you to leave, as you wont be coming in.
Northern man
That guy seems to think he is all-important V.I.P security person
Another northern man
Means your not important enough piss head.
Other northern man
Is that true? You think I’m not good enough to talk to you?
The security guard doesn’t reply.
Northern man
Oi, I’m talking to you!
INT. – HOSPITAL – DAY
There is a silent atmosphere where the man is laying, his wife is beside him and all we can hear is the life support machine. As the noises of the machine get louder and louder till there is nothing else to hear a doctor suddenly enters the room. The woman jumps up and starts asking questions.
Woman
How is he? Is he getting better? How long is he going to stay like this?
Doctor
We are still very uncertain about his condition. He has received a very a bad hit to his brain making it unpredictable what will happen next.
Woman (with a raised voice)
How do you mean it’s unpredictable? I thought suppose to be good at this stuff?
Doctor
With injuries to the brain it will be more complicated and we still don’t have enough information…
Woman (furiously cuts in)
But you have done all your stupid scans and tests! Surely you should be able to tell what it’s wrong with him!
Doctor
Please Mrs Stone, you will have to come down. I know this must be a difficult time for…
Woman
Don’t tell me that you have any idea how I feel! This isn’t some kind of film where you can just say things like this and I will be just fine like that!
Doctor
I’m sorry…
Woman
“I’m sorry” isn’t going to do it. Just tell me do you at least know if he’s going to live or die?
Doctor
We really are not sure about his condition…
Woman
Oh just go. Please leave me alone!
The man leaves. The woman starts crying and has rests her head on her husband’s bed.
EXT. – CLUB – NIGHT TIME
The men are still talking to the security guard. You can hear the noises from inside the club.
Northern men
Now that sounds like a good party going on in there. Want to see if we can turn it into a great one?
Security Guard
I’m sorry but you are far too drunk for my liking.
Northern man (mimicking his voice)
“I’m sorry but you are far too drunk for my liking”, jeez to you always try to sound that posh?
The security guard is ignoring them again.
Northern man
Christ he is flipping ignoring us again. He really does think he is too good for us.
Second Northern man
And he also doesn’t want us into his club. He probably thinks northern men aren’t good enough for this area.
A second security guy comes over to inspect what’s going on.
Second security guard
Is there a problem here?
Northern man
Yeah, your dodgy looking friend is making one. He thinks your poxy-looking club is too good for us.
First Security guard
I’m going to have to ask you to leave now.
Northern man
See what I mean? He is still treating us like northern trash we should have him done for racism.
Security guard
This has nothing to do with your background if you are that drunk then we can’t let you in.
Northern man
Why? You think we going to fall over or hurt ourselves.
Second security guard
There is a risk of you hurting others.
Northern man
Because we are just a bunch of drunks, going around causing fights?
They start laughing.
Northern man
Lets go mates this is starting get boring.
The two northern men leave.
Second security guard
You OK?
Security guard
Just about.
Second security guard
Listen those guys are definitely trouble. If they come back make sure to give us a shout, got it.
Security guard
Got it.
INT. – HOSPITAL ROOM – DAY
Scene is speeded up showing that she has been waiting for her husband to wake up for day. She is moving around, sitting and sleeping. Back in normal time, one of the machines makes a noise indicating that there is something wrong with her husband can be heard. The hospital staff starts rushing in.
Woman
What’s going on? What’s happening to him?
The nurses and doctors keep on doing what they are doing.
Woman
Why is this thing doing that noise? Can someone tell me what the hell is happening?
One of the nurses comes over and tries to calm her.
Nurse
I’m sorry but you will have to wait outside until we are finished in here
Woman
What do you mean that’s my husband you are treating will you please tell me what’s the matter with him!
Nurse
I’m sorry
The nurse brings the woman outside and she has to watch through the window and observes what’s happening.
Scene change.
EXT. – CLUB – NIGHT TIME
The Security guard is still by the door. The three northern men are coming back but are now even drunker then before. They slightly stumble and (are singing old football songs maybe).
Northern men (shouts)
Aaalllrigth mate!
Security Guard
You guys again. I already told you you can’t came in when you’re that drunk.
Northern man
Mate you still playing the Mr. V.I.P guy? Lighten up will ya.
Security Guard
I’ll have to ask you to leave again
Northern man
Again? Mate you have some real attitude problems alright. All we want is just a good time so no need to keep on getting lippy with us.
Second northern man
He just thinks because he’s bigger then us he can talk anyway he likes to us.
Third northern man
Is that what it is? You think you’re harder than us have you ever fought a one of us?
Security guard
No I haven’t and neither do I…
Third northern man
Well like my grandpa always says don’t judge a book by its cover
First northern man
And I say you got to first fight a man get to know him.
Security guard
I’m not going to fight anyone here nor anywhere so all of you might as well leave right now!
INT. – HOSPITAL – DAY
The situation in the hospital room has calmed down. The woman is now hysterically talking to the doctor and nurses.
Nurse
Everything is fine now your husband’s condition has stabilized.
Woman
What do you mean stabilized he’s still in a coma.
Nurse
Yes but at least he is we have his condition controlled fro now.
Woman
What do you mean for now is he going to go through this again?
Doctor
At the moment we can’t predict how is condition will be in the next hours…
Woman
Stop saying condition it isn’t helping ok. If you think your patients will feel better because you use your fancy medical talk then your wrong it just makes things worse.
Nurse
Screaming isn’t going to help neither you really have to calm down and be strong for your husband.
Woman
How am I suppose to be strong if I don’t even know what’s going to happen to him your not even sure if he’ll ever wake up.
Nurse
That’s why you have to be strong, I know this will probably be the hardest thing you’ll ever have to do but you will have to be patient and wait for him to wake up.
Woman
Even knowing that he might never wake up?
Nurse
If you really love him then it will be worth the wait.
The woman looks at her husband through the room’s window and you can feel how she is in a state of inner conflict.
EXT. – CLUB – NIGHT
The 3 men are still harassing the security guard.
Security guard
I really had about enough from you guys.
Northern man
We really had about enough from you but you don’t hear us complaining, do you?
Security guard
Listen if you don’t leave right now I’ll have you forcedly remove.
Northern man
Then why don’t you try to forcedly remove us?
One of the men shuffles him and the security guard pushes him back. He tries to take out a walkie-talkie for back up but they slap that out of his hand.
Northern man
Sorry did you just try to call someone? I thought you were big enough to take us all on?
Northern man #2
Yeah what happened mate are you getting scared.
Security man
I want you to leave right now!
Northern man
Still barking out orders? When you going to realize you have nothing to say?
Security guard
If you don’t do as I say then…
Northern man
What? What’s going to happen then?
Security guard
Look just leave me alone I really don’t want any hassle.
Northern man
Uh oh, looks like the big man is shitting his pants.
The men start laughing.
Security men
Please just leave
Northern man
Not until we taught you some manners young misters.
They start to push him around and he is starting to have problems taking care of all of them at once. Now cornered he’s starting to get really scared.
Security guard
Please just let me…
There is a POV of him getting punch by one of the men. Screen goes black.
INT. – HOSPITAL – DAY
The woman is sitting on a chair with looking at her husband whose condition is stable but is still in a coma. She just looks at him in silence waiting and hoping he will wake up. The clicking noise of the clock can be heard with an ECU of it for a few seconds. There is a CU of her face while she is intensely looking at her husband and very slowly starts breaking out in tears.
END
Based on a true story
First draft script
INT. – HOSPITAL – DAY
A woman in her 30’s is running through hospital corridors to find her husband, she has been directed by the receptionist. She then sees her husband through a window, and pushes the door and walks in slowly.
The woman is sitting next to a comatose man in his 40’s. She starts talking to him in a tearful voice. However it seems as she is talking more to herself then him.
Woman:
No, no, o god don’t worry. Please come back to me along with your happy and healthy old self. I know things are looking very grim now but I just want to let you know that I *Sniffs* I do love you!
EXT. – CLUB – NIGHT TIME
Scene change. The man is standing in front of a club by the doors as a bouncer. Three northern men are approaching the club. They seem very drunk and are singing and talking complete gibberish.
INT. – HOSPITAL – DAY
Back in the hospital room the woman is still talking to the comatose men.
Woman:
This is my entire fault isn’t it? Because I just kept pushing to find a job so that I can buy myself those ridiculous expenses, which I don’t even, need. It’s my entire fault because for being such a selfish cow and that’s why you had to go get more shifts at that wretched nightclub. I’m so sorry Steve I really am. I promise to be more considerate when you wake up, please wake up.
EXT. – CLUB – NIGHT TIME
Back at the club the northern men now approach the man and they start talking to him very drunk.
One of the northern men:
Alrite mate, what youu doing out here in the fucking cold when there is a fucking party going on in there.
The man does not reply.
Another northern men:
Ay, are you fucking deaf? He asked you a question man.
Security Guard:
Sorry but Im not going to communicate with you, while your using that tone.
Northern man:
O serious you need to get a fucking life mate.
Security Guard:
I’m going to ask you to leave, as you wont be coming in.
Northern man
That guy seems to think he is all-import:ant V.I.P security person
Another northern man:
Means your not important enough piss head.
Other northern man:
Is that true? You think I’m not good enough to talk to you?
The security guard doesn’t reply.
Northern man:
Oi, I’m talking to you!
INT. – HOSPITAL – DAY
There is a silent atmosphere where the man is laying, his wife is beside him and all we can hear is the life support machine. As the noises of the machine get louder and louder till there is nothing else to hear a doctor suddenly enters the room. The woman jumps up and starts asking questions.
Woman;
How is he? Is he getting better? How long is he going to stay like this?
Doctor:
We are still very uncertain about his condition. He has received a very a bad hit to his brain making it unpredictable what will happen next.
Woman: (with a raised voice)
How do you mean it’s unpredictable? I thought suppose to be good at this stuff?
Doctor:
With injuries to the brain it will be more complicated and we still don’t have enough information…
Woman (furiously cuts in)
But you have done all your stupid scans and tests! Surely you should be able to tell what it’s wrong with him!
Doctor
Please Mrs Stone, you will have to come down. I know this must be a difficult time for…
Woman
Don’t tell me that you have any idea how I feel! This isn’t some kind of film where you can just say things like this and I will be just fine like that!
Doctor
I’m sorry…
Woman
“I’m sorry” isn’t going to do it. Just tell me do you at least know if he’s going to live or die?
Doctor
We really are not sure about his condition…
Woman
Oh just go. Please leave me alone!
The man leaves. The woman starts crying and has rests her head on her husband’s bed.
EXT. – CLUB – NIGHT TIME
The men are still talking to the security guard. You can hear the noises from inside the club.
Northern men
Now that sounds like a good party going on in there. Want to see if we can turn it into a great one?
Security Guard
I’m sorry but you are far too drunk for my liking.
Northern man (mimicking his voice)
“I’m sorry but you are far too drunk for my liking”, jeez to you always try to sound that posh?
The security guard is ignoring them again.
Northern man
Christ he is flipping ignoring us again. He really does think he is too good for us.
Second Northern man
And he also doesn’t want us into his club. He probably thinks northern men aren’t good enough for this area.
A second security guy comes over to inspect what’s going on.
Second security guard
Is there a problem here?
Northern man
Yeah, your dodgy looking friend is making one. He thinks your poxy-looking club is too good for us.
First Security guard
I’m going to have to ask you to leave now.
Northern man
See what I mean? He is still treating us like northern trash we should have him done for racism.
Security guard
This has nothing to do with your background if you are that drunk then we can’t let you in.
Northern man
Why? You think we going to fall over or hurt ourselves.
Second security guard
There is a risk of you hurting others.
Northern man (furiously)
So that’s what this is about. Our reputation as northern men you going to just stereotype us as a bunch of drunk, crazy bastards who go around causing fights? Well guess you caused this one mate and this is going too end bad got it.
The two northern men leave.
Second security guard
You OK?
Security guard
Just about.
Second security guard
Listen those guys are definitely trouble. They might come back with more of their mates if no what I’m talking about.
Security guard
…
Second security guard
Don’t worry if they do come back we’ll simply have to lock the doors for a while and wait for them to leave. Got it.
Security guard
Got it.
INT. – HOSPITAL ROOM – DAY
Scene is speeded up showing that she has been waiting for her husband to wake up for day. She is moving around, sitting and sleeping. Back in normal time, one of the machines makes a noise indicating that there is something wrong with her husband can be heard. The hospital staff starts rushing in.
Woman
What’s going on? What’s happening to him?
The nurses and doctors keep on doing what they are doing.
Woman
Why is this thing doing that noise? Can someone tell me what the hell is happening?
One of the nurses comes over and tries to calm her.
Nurse
I’m sorry but you will have to wait outside until we are finished in here
Woman
What do you mean that’s my husband you are treating will you please tell me what’s the matter with him!
Nurse
I’m sorry
The nurse brings the woman outside and she has to watch through the window and observes what’s happening.
Scene change.
EXT. – CLUB – NIGHT TIME
The Security guard is still by the door. He gets a call on his walkie-talkie from his supervisor saying:
Supervisor
Attention all security units! A group of men are on they way here to start a fight. Tell all visitors outside to make they way home and to be careful. After that we will lock the doors.
After hearing the message he starts telling the people outside to leave. One of them is insisting of wanting to stay outside and to finish his cigarette and after going back in.
Security guard
You really have to leave now it will get very dangerous here in a minute.
Man
Alright, alright come down am only finishing the fag then I’ll be back inside.
Security guard
No you either need to leave right now or if you have a friend or so who is inside, go back in the club and stay there for another hour.
Man
Look am not sure what kind of ‘evil men’ are coming but I think I can handle a few thugs alright.
Security guard
Look this isn’t a joke OK this is serious. There seems to be a very large group of men coming over in a second and not just some ‘few thugs’ and you really need to leave if you don’t want to… (Interrupted)
Northern man
Oi, look who is there its Mister V.I.P
A large group of scary looking men have arrived at the club. The man with the cigarette starts walking away by the sight of them. He tries to shout something in his walkie-talkie but one of the men slaps it out of his hand. The security guard then tries to run back in to the club however the doors are locked. The men are closing in on him having him completely surrounded and despite his banging and shouting the door doesn’t open. The men start to laugh.
Northern men
OI, oi looks like mister V.I.P isn’t that important after all. Stop banging at the door and start fighting like men.
One of the men has grabbed him and punched him in his face. They all start kicking and punching him while he is collapsed on the floor trying to shield himself as best as he can.
INT. – HOSPITAL – DAY
The woman is sitting on a chair with looking at her husband whose condition is stable but is still in a coma. She just looks at him in silence waiting and hoping he will wake up. The clicking noise of the clock can be heard with an ECU of it for a few seconds. There is a CU of her face while she is intensely looking at her husband and very slowly starts breaking out in tears.
END
Based on a true story
Titles with pictures of the real life security guard when he was in the hospital.
When writing the script the film that inspired me the most was ‘Requiem for a Dream’ by Darren Aronovski. This was because the way they approached a crisis and communicated it to the audience I regard as very effective and we have adapted some of the style and filming techniques used into our own film.
Tuesday, 24 November 2009
Initiation of film project
Before we first started anything we have been given a stimulus on which we were supposed to try and base our film on. This stimulus was crisis. We came up with a list of thoughts and feelings we associated with it. I came up with a range of different things, the first thing being midlife crisis, e.g. a man that has reached a certain stage of his life and realizing he hasn’t achieved everything he wanted to achieve in life and that it is now too late. Another response was identity crisis where the person is uncertain who he is and wants to discover him. Family crisis was another one and food crisis but also less associated things like ‘Infinite crisis’, which is a storyline in the DC universe came to mind. The feelings I associated with crisis were feelings of not in control of things, lost, pain, danger and anxiety.
We then tried coming up with stories based on them themes we came up with. Me and my coursework partner started first with an idea based on the terrorism crisis which Britain still fears, and came up with a man being attacked and hold hostage by terrorists, however exploring he’s life and building up a relationship between the person and the viewer who can connect with that person due to the fact that everyone has this fear now. We then decided to explore maybe a person’s relationship with his older brother to whom he looked up to all his life and who’s been injured in the war and is now a cripple and therefore a mere shadow of the hero self. We found this idea very intriguing because it allowed us to explore the inner conflict of someone trying to be like a person who isn’t that person anymore and has to maybe think about the possibility that his hero was following a path of doom. However even though the idea seemed very promising we decided to go with a story, which was based on true events that had happened to a real person. This was because it was more personal and therefore we could put in more emotion into it then a story, which we just made up. This story is about a woman who had to spent 48 hours next to her comatose husband without knowing whether he would ever wake up or not. We also decided to add in flashbacks showing how he has ended up in this stage and all the information we received is based on what the real life person has told us.
When writing the script the film that inspired me the most was ‘Requiem for a Dream’ by Darren Aronovski. This was because the way they approached a crisis and communicated it to the audience I regard as very effective and we have adapted some of the style and filming techniques used into our own film.
Before we first started anything we have been given a stimulus on which we were supposed to try and base our film on. This stimulus was crisis. We came up with a list of thoughts and feelings we associated with it. I came up with a range of different things, the first thing being midlife crisis, e.g. a man that has reached a certain stage of his life and realizing he hasn’t achieved everything he wanted to achieve in life and that it is now too late. Another response was identity crisis where the person is uncertain who he is and wants to discover him. Family crisis was another one and food crisis but also less associated things like ‘Infinite crisis’, which is a storyline in the DC universe came to mind. The feelings I associated with crisis were feelings of not in control of things, lost, pain, danger and anxiety.
We then tried coming up with stories based on them themes we came up with. Me and my coursework partner started first with an idea based on the terrorism crisis which Britain still fears, and came up with a man being attacked and hold hostage by terrorists, however exploring he’s life and building up a relationship between the person and the viewer who can connect with that person due to the fact that everyone has this fear now. We then decided to explore maybe a person’s relationship with his older brother to whom he looked up to all his life and who’s been injured in the war and is now a cripple and therefore a mere shadow of the hero self. We found this idea very intriguing because it allowed us to explore the inner conflict of someone trying to be like a person who isn’t that person anymore and has to maybe think about the possibility that his hero was following a path of doom. However even though the idea seemed very promising we decided to go with a story, which was based on true events that had happened to a real person. This was because it was more personal and therefore we could put in more emotion into it then a story, which we just made up. This story is about a woman who had to spent 48 hours next to her comatose husband without knowing whether he would ever wake up or not. We also decided to add in flashbacks showing how he has ended up in this stage and all the information we received is based on what the real life person has told us.
Monday, 9 November 2009
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